Sunday, August 7, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - #5


Last week we met Willow when her life was set on a purpose - now we will see her when that purpose and that path shatters. From my WIP A Taste for a Mate:


Her eye was already black and blue but oddly enough the swelling seemed to have gone down. There were cuts and scrapes along her cheek and hairline but the blood had been washed away by Jasper the night before. Lowering the neck of Jasper’s shirt she saw bruising around her throat in the shape of the collar that had been placed around her neck and the impression of Jasper's bite that had saved her. Lifting the hem she could see the stark contrast between the heavy and dark purple bruising and the paleness of her skin. Struggling and panting after taking a deep breath she knew her ribs were damaged but not beyond repair. The image in the mirror was not that of the baker and loner she had been the day before, but the survivor who was now eternally bound to her mate – Jasper.

Next week we will see just a glimpse of how she got to this point. Thank you so much for coming by again! Any comments and feedback are welcome.

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59 comments:

  1. Damn! Talk about walking through hell to find the one you're meant to be with. Harsh path all the way around. Nicely conveyed!

    ~Xakara
    A Way To A Dragon's Heart 6SS

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  2. Great description! Fabulous six, with loads of promise of whats to come.

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  3. Great description in this piece. Well done!

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  4. Can feel her injuries - ouch. But intriguing six!

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  5. I think it's great how you've shown her damaged body and included how she was saved by Jasper. Well done!

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  6. Very deft writing. Love the way you're making her grow and change in the story. Great six!

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  7. Well described. Nicely done!

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  8. Wow, the last line really pulls the transformation together. That's her ah ha moment!

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  9. Great description, particularly juxtaposed with that last line--enjoyed!

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  10. Can feel her pain. Or at least her bruises.

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  11. This is excellent. I went to look for the book b4 I saw it was a WIP. Can't wait to read more : )

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  12. Amazing six. Great emotions and descriptions. I'll be looking for this one when it's released.

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  13. Great six. Fantastic descriptions here and the injuries make me want to know what's going o n.

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  14. I really enjoyed that six. You did really fantastic with that descriptive writing. (The blue hurt my eyes! LOL)

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  15. This is fantastic. Really pulled me in.

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  16. Quite a transformation. Very effective!

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  17. I'm color blind Rebecca so I didn't realize it would hurt! Sorry hon!

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  18. Whoa, rough night. The idea of a collar around her neck gives me the willies.

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  19. Thank you so much everyone for liking my six! I am still working on the novel but hopefully I can submit it and then if the publishing gods like it...

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  20. She's a mess! Poor girl, great six Carrie

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  21. Wonderful description. You do a great job of taking us along on her journey.

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  22. Excellent six. Can't wait to read more. The publishing god's better love it. I want to read it.

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  23. I can almost feel her pain. Well done!

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  24. Good use of color to help paint your scene. Good job.

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  25. The pic you chose was perfect! Your Six draws a physical description perfectly, but also there is an underlying buzz of the emotional change as well! Very Well done, CarrieAnn!

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  26. Oh wow. Sounds like quite a bit happened between last week and this! ;-) Great six!

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  27. Intense! Would love to read more :-)

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  28. yes that last line pulled it all together

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  29. Wow, that really grabbed me.

    Can't wait to read more!

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  30. Wow, I'm totally blown away by this passage! Excellent!

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  31. Excellent description - I could feel her pain and how she must ache!

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  32. oohhh, excellent description and very intriguing!

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  33. A creation moment? Got me wondering, that's for sure!

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  34. I love all the detail you've included, especially how you describe her change. Good writing. (Note: I wish you had more contrast in the color you used for your text. The blue against the black background wasn't easy to read.)

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  35. I changed the font to white - I hope that helps. Thanks!

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  36. Sounds like she was nearly beat to death. Hope her new man helped her get thru that - and will continue to! great use of description.

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  37. Definite hook there. Pulled me right in!

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  38. Amazingly descriptive snippet.

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  39. One minute you're baking cookies and a wedding cake for the couple down the street. The next thing you know someone has a collar around your neck and is beating the crap out of you. Sounds like she's had a rough one.

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  40. And that was only the first 5 chapters - just imagine when the action really starts!

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  41. Amazing six! I was right there with the character and want to know more. Terrific work.

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  42. Wow, very intense moment here! Great six!

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  43. intriguing - how did she get this way?

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  44. I like the way you have her looking at her own body as if she needs to convince herself of the drastic change that has taken place in her life. It makes her character very believable.

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  45. Now my interest all piqued and whatnot. Great six!

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  46. Lovely description. I get a complete picture of who she was and how she changed in just 6 sentences.

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  47. Great six! It makes me wonder what happened to her, and between her and Jasper. I want to read more :)

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  48. Damn, poor girl! Hopefully Jasper kisses all her wounds better! :)

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  49. You painted an entire picture of the scene with just 6 sentences! Nicely done!

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  50. Very tense six. I like how she's hurt, but rolling with the punches. Girl's got strength. ;)

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  51. You get a real feel for the shift in perspective she's been forced to undergo.

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  52. Intriguing situation with a great strong hook at the end! Suspenseful six! (Love the lightning background, by the way--I'm a big fan of lightning so long as it doesn't hit me!)

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  53. OMG that poor girl. she really was put throught eh mill.

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