Sunday, September 11, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday - #10


Before I give you my six:
Eleven years ago last week my brother got his first big job. 
Ten years ago today I lost my brother because of hate and radicalism. 
Ten years ago today my Mother and Father left a 15 year old me in charge of my 11 year old sister to go to another country to fight for ours, grief heavily on their mind. 
Ten years ago today I didn't get to say goodbye to my brother, but I will always love him. I don't post pictures of that day, nor do I write about him often. 
But he was the one who taught me to describe things in my English essays when I was in middle school. 
Big Brother, these insignificant words are for you:


From my WIP A Taste for a Mate - Book 1 of the Redwood Pack



            The smell of fresh paint and wood shavings tickled Willow’s nose. The tangy scent of male sweat on glistening bodies mixed with the sweet and surgery chocolate aroma from the brownies she baked that morning, a luscious and sinful combination if there ever was one.

            The marble countertop was cool to the touch as she ran her hand along the smooth edge. The deep ruby red velvet inlay of the picture board above the glass panels clung to her fingers. Burgundy and chocolate ribbons adorned it, begging for pictures and memories to surface and be known. To be immortalized.



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54 comments:

  1. My heart goes out to you, Carrie Ryan.

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  2. I think that last line, pulls it together darlin.

    I'm truly sorry for your loss. Keep those memories alive girl! *hugs*

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  3. I love that last line. And I'm so sorry for your loss.

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  4. Love you sweetie ♥ thank you for sharing.

    xx
    A.

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  5. Beautiful Carrie, your writing is sublime x

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  6. Great imagery, your brother would be so proud of you.

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  7. Wonderful description! I agree, your brother would be proud.

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  8. Very visual with great last line. Sorry for your loss, Carrie. I'm sure your brother is proud of every word you write.

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  9. Lovely description.

    So sorry for your loss, Carrie. I'm glad you have good memories and love to hold on to.

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  10. A wonderful decription and great six. Thanks for sharing with us. I'm sending postive thoughts your way. Blessings to you and yours.

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  11. I'm so sorry for your loss. My thoughts and prayers are with you and your family. Such a beautiful tribute to your brother.

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  12. I'm so sorry for your loss Carrie. Your writing is a wonderful tribute to him.

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  13. Beautiful intro. Sorry for your loss, Carrie Ann. Loved your six :)

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  14. Lovely, vivid scene xxx And i'm so sorry for your loss ((hugs))

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  15. So sorry for your loss.

    Your six is beautifully written.

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  16. Thank you for sharing. Your writing is very visual.

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  17. Beautifully written description and a truly moving last line. So very sorry for your loss, Carrie Ann. But your brother would be most proud of his little sister right now for her writing and her courage.

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  18. Powerful & compelling, Bravo, Carrie.

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  19. Wow, Carrie. What a way to keep your brother's memory alive! I'm sure he's proud of you...

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  20. Beautiful description. I'm so glad you have great memories to keep with you.

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  21. First, Thank you for sharing your loss with us. No one can ever know what you went through and what you are still going through. You are a powerful woman.

    Second, Great, amazing, awesome, wonderful description! I wish I could write like that!

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  22. Beautiful words, from both your fiction and your life. Thanks so much for sharing, Carrie Ann.

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  23. Such an awful time for so many people. i'm sorry for your loss.
    A lovely and touching tribute, especially about the space waiting for pictures.

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  24. Mmm, sounds very interesting. Great six!

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  25. Very poignant and moving six. I am so sorry for your personal loss. Today touches so many of us. Your brother would be so proud of you.:) xo

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  26. Aww thanks for sharing your memories of the day. Stay strong :-)

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  27. Your last sentence...is simply beautiful.

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  28. I'm sorry to hear about the toll 9/11 took on you and your family, Carrie. :( Your brother would be proud of your writing, I'm sure.

    And your six is yummy!

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  29. Wonderful descriptive Six.

    I'm sorry for your loss and the toll this day took on your family. Hugs.

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  30. I love the tactile detail in this description.

    I'm so sorry about your brother, Carrie.

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  31. So many senses invoked in these wonderfully descriptive lines. I think your brother would've been proud of your writing.

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  32. Beautiful tribute to your brother, Carrie Ann. And wonderful six to follow - vivid, enchanting words.

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  33. You words are beautifully significant. My thoughts are with you, lovely Lady.

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  34. I wouldn't be surprised to learn if your brother were in a few of your characters. God bless our service men and women...and for the sacrifices they make. Great job on your six!

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  35. Wonderful 6 -- you're brother is proud of you....
    **we will never forget**

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  36. Wow, great description there. Rich and luscious.

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  37. Thanks for sharing your six and your memories. Both are moving and incredibly touching. And I agree - your brother would be proud of you.

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  38. There's a special place in your heart and mind for those who are gone. He gave you a gift with what he taught you, and you're using it well.

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  39. Great six Carrie and I'm sorry about your loss. :(

    Much love and positive thoughts to you

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  40. Smell-and-taste is the sense of memory, and what's striking here is that this less-used sense is foregrounded here.

    In memoriam: our teachers live forever in what they teach us, and what we pass on.

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  41. He would be so proud of you. This was very evocative.

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  42. Fantastic six! My thoughts are with you.

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  43. There are no insignificant words. Your brother would be proud of the beauty in your words. Thank you for sharing, Carrie. <3

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  44. I am so sorry for your loss. Your words are far from insignificant. You honor and make your brother proud every time you express yourself in such beautiful words. Wonderful six!

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  45. Very nice six. Words are sometimes inadequate when you suffer a traumatic loss. Neither words of sympathy or condolence are enough to make us feel better nor is the expression of our grief through words enough to ease our pain. Still, our indomitable human spirit muddles through and usually does not stay beaten down which is a good thing because those we've lost wouldn't wish us to remain heartbroken. I'm sure your brother is very proud of what you've accomplished.

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  46. Very good descriptions. I loved the line about the smell of men and chocolate. An absolutely decadent combination. Good six.

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  47. I'm so sorry for your loss, sweetie. I know that doesn't even cover it - but I had to say it anyway. Keep smiling, I'm sure that's what your brother would have wanted.

    And he'd be proud of how well you're doing now.

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  48. Great use of the senses in this Six! Very well written. So very sorry for your loss!!! Take care!

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  49. Thank you for sharing, and I'm SO sorry about your loss.

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  50. Your six were amazing. I keep rereading because the passage feels poignant. Great job!

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